Your friend is coming over to stay with you. However, you will be away on vacation for a month. Write him/her a letter and say:

- How to get the keys to your flat
- How to operate the equipment in the flat, and
- Suggest a few places of interest to visit

Dear Susan,

Hope {tooltip}this{end-link}this letter{end-tooltip} finds you well. As I wrote to you in my previous letter, I am unable to cancel the finalised trip {tooltip}visit{end-link}to visit{end-tooltip} my parents. But, soon after you arrive in Melbourne, contact Jessie, a good friend of mine on 0425680256. She offered her help to pick you up from the airport and you can collect the key from her.

I must say that sometimes, the hot water geezer turns off automatically so, you might have to make sure it is switched on before having a shower. Also, the gas heater fixed in the lounge does not work, but you can use the oil heater in my {tooltip}bed room{end-link}bedroom{end-tooltip} instead.

If you have time you might enjoy visiting the Aquarium, the Queen Victoria Market and the Botanical Gardens as these places are not that far from where I live. I hope you are happy with this arrangement, but if you need more help or information please let me know.

Looking forward to {tooltip}hear{end-link}hearing{end-tooltip} from you.

With love,

Amber.

All the requirements of the task were covered fairly well. The bullet points were mentioned, emphasized and illustrated in a suitable and logical way. The tone of this letter needs to be less formal. The ideas are presented in a logical order and all aspects of cohesion are taken care of well. The paragraphing is handled suitably and appropriately. Some sophisticated words/expressions are used in a clever way, with only occasional errors in word choice/expression choice. Most sentences are free of errors. Overall, seems worthy of Band 8.

Source: ielts-blog.com

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